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In this empty room
We stand together
In silence
In the darkness

Our shattered hearts
Bleeding together as one
While the blood runs
Through our cold skin

This is what love is like
Two broken people
Sharing their pain
Merging their empty souls

We forget about the world
Because we live in a world of our own
United as one
In an illusion of happiness
Something about love. It's kida bittersweet but it's the best I can give you.
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Wow I was astonished! This brought chills up my spine! This explains what happens with two people, broken people, are brought together by love. Their wounds of the past shall be healed by working together. Another saying of "you make me feel whole" . This brings out my hopeless romantic side that makes me want to skng love songs and waltz. At first when I saw it I thought it seemed like a "Romeo and Juilet" theme of which two people would do anything for love. However, I was deeply inpressed and moved by this piece of poetry. I look forward to seeing more from you.
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Seriously my most favorite piece of yours that you have ever written, ever. I absolutely love this one. Reading it, there's images of a story that begins to blossom, but the way you've written it leaves out just enough specifics that the story can be more personal to the person. "Open to interpretation" as the usual phrase always is... On basis on originality, the idea of love and the factors you've mentioned have been used before in other pieces but its not a common topic. And this was much more beautifully written rather sounding like this dreading, heart-breaking story. Your descriptive words, describing the scene, really helps with that. It's a lightening message almost, portrayed with words in which many have more so of a negative connotation. It does create the lovliest bittersweet feeling to this. :meow: Impact. I'm not sure what else I can say without repeating myself over. For some, it could make them rethink the definition to the idea of love and for those it doesn't - I'm sure there's pieces to the feelings in this that they can connect to. Really a beautiful, bittersweet, well-written piece.
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speed8999 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
An illusion, it is... been there... once, twice.... too many times... yet i choose not to believe...
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killerlord123 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
I know that feeling... It's like a poison we can't avoid.
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Deadfish-SilentArmy Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is a good one, so much emotion.
So many words that I relate to, and that I wish I had.
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killerlord123 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014
Thanks. I wish I had it too...
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Deadfish-SilentArmy Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:nod: may be one day eh!
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killerlord123 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Yeah :)
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sohinidutta Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... this js a beautiful write. Very well versed and creates a deep impact.
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killerlord123 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it :)
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ReinerAckerman Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Preach on!
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killerlord123 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014
Yeah.
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